Tuesday, September 1, 2015

Tia/Alex Bully SRO

Summary Response Outline

Summary:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
  • Bully, a documentary by Lee Hirsch, demonstrates how the quality of life of a student can rapidly decline after and during the time one is verbally and physically abused by their peers.
  • Supporting ideas and explanations to prove main ideas
  • By looking into the lives of people who were bullied, one can make inferences about the quality of life of the students. Bullying has the ability to decrease the self esteem and emotional stability of the victim because of the possible stress they may face at school. The kids describe what happens to them when they’re at school and how the administration doesn’t penalize the bullies enough to stop the harassment that they encounter. Bullying is a problem that occurs frequently in schools across the country.  
Response:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays) because ___________ .
  • Bully by Lee Hirsch accurately explores how bullying can have large impact on one’s life because it ventured into the lives of several kids who were bullied by the people they went to school with.
  • Claim 1: Bullying makes an impact on the lives of people that are bullied.
    • Set-up
    • The lives of several adolescents who are or were bullied are explored in the movie. During the movie, they discussed how they were being mentally and physically hurt by their peers and how that had an effect on their lives at home and school.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (  I, iii, 233-236  )
    • One teen named Tyler had committed suicide because he had a “...target on his back,” as quoted by his father.
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
    • Traits that are out of the ordinary can make someone seen to be a weaker person, and through this they can become a potential victim. Unfortunately, Tyler was bullied for the traits that made him stick out and eventually the abuse, whether it was verbal or physical, led him to kill himself.

  • Counterclaim 1: Bullying can be solved through simple administrative action and words.
  • Set-up
    • The administrators in some schools believe that bullying can be solved through simple means, such as shaking hands. They also can face consequences when the bullying increases in intensity. These consequences can end the bullying for good.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • It is simple for bullying to be solved. That’s because of the nature of boys. The teasing they do will be harmless, because “...Kids will be kids, boys will be boys, they’re just cruel at this age,” (Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
    • A common view is that teasing is harmless and it’s just how boys will be, good or otherwise. The boys will be able to shake hands and make up since what they say is very prevalent and it’s not meant to be serious.
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument?
  • Although some bullying can be solved in simple means, each case of bullying is different and one can’t apply an uninvolved method for every instance. The argument is rather flippant, since bullying is considered an “epidemic” in public schools. If the problem of bullying was easy to solve, then bullying would have been minimized across the country. Although there are some strengths in the argument, the flaws outweigh them.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • Bullying can have a significant influence on one’s life. Whether it be verbal or physical abuse, bullying can present a number of issues for the victim.

Strong Verb List:
Tells, explains, compares, describes, gives, presents, lists, shows, defines, demonstrates, acknowledges, evaluates, classifies, adds, explores, confuses, advises, expresses, defends, asserts, features, depicts, assures, furnishes, encourages, blames, identifies, entertains, confirms, names, illustrates, confronts, offends, invites, considers, offers, judges, contrasts, predicts, misjudges, critiques, proposes, praises, demonstrates, provides, recommends, denounces, traces, simplifies, discourages, answers, solves, endorses, asks, suggests, entices, captures, supports, enumerates, classifies, teaches.

Rebuttal Progression:
1st step: Describe a "naive response" or an opposing interpretation of your position. A "naive view" is a view that you personally disagree with or a view that misses something important. But don't use the word "naive." Say something like…
I used to think that...
A common view is that...
At first glance...
Many think that....
X argues that...
Critics of ____ propose...

2nd step: Briefly explain the logic or reasoning of this "naive view." Answer the question, "Why would someone think this way? Why would they find their answer or solution logical or reasonable?" Why did I think this way? Say something like...
We cannot deny that...
This way of making sense of the position makes a degree of sense [why?]
This position seems reasonable [why?]
I can understand why someone might interpret X in this way [explain how so]
These conclusions seem compelling [why?]

3rd step: Provide a transition that indicates that you are going to contrast this "naive view." Say something like...
However...
But it's more complicated than that...
This interpretation is helpful, but it misses an important point...
This interpretation raises a fundamental question...
While this view seems plausible/reasonable at first glance, we should look closer...

Many think that bullying can’t have an impact on the lives of the victims. It can be understood why someone might interpret bullying in this way because they believe that the damage the person may face is only skin deep and that they can simply change classes or attempt to resolve the issue through words. Also, some can believe that the threat of consequences will dissuade them from bullying others. However, this documentary has laid out the facts about the nature of bullying. The adolescents can’t simply forget about their problems if they are moved to another a class, because they may be targeted for the same reasons they had before. It can be verbal as well as physical, and the effects are long lasting, repeated, and can cause trauma in those targeted.

1 comment:

  1. Good summary work- make sure that you are attributing ideas back to the director/author in your summary as he/she is making the points you are writing about. For example, Hirsch shows...

    Good start to your response. Make sure you are watching repetitiveness in your initial set-up of your quotation. Where is the citation? (Hirsch) Your claim could be so much more powerful by spending more time setting up the situation of Tyler and what he endured. It seems too surface level. Good counterclaim- could you push this to go more in depth as well? Set up the situation with the administrator, etc. Once again, missing citation. Rebuttal is a good start, but could be more developed. Concluding sentence? I am not sure which rebuttal to read as there is one down below as well

    15/20

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